Response to Max Jentsch's Post

I agree with Max on his demonstration evaluation of how to make a paper airplane. I watched the video on youtube, and you are able to see very clearly all the steps the demonstrator does in order to show you how to make the airplane. Being that the camera was at a bird's eye view, this was very helpful because it was easier to see and also easier to follow along. If I was doing this with the demonstrator I would easily being able to do it at the same time. I also agree with Max in the fact that a person speaking throughout the entire video would get very annoying and frustrating. To be able to just follow along, with having to listen to someone makes the process that much more relaxing.

Some problems that are wrong with the paper airplane video that Max was able to find and I agree with are that the demonstrator does not repeat any steps of the process. Repeating the steps of the process is always  good tactic because it makes it easier for people to follow along. Of course, it is a video so you are able to just rewind it, but if this was a live performance or a 'How to' speech it would be a better tactic to repeat steps. Although the silence was soothing, Max had another observation that I agree with. To put some background music into the video would make the whole demonstration a lot better. Without the music in the background, the process is a little boring.

Technorati Blog Post

When searching Technorati to find a blog that would be relevant to my persuasive essay topic, I found a blog perfect for the discussion of Title IX. The blog is called the National Women's Law Center, and it provides a place for people to express their opinion about laws regarding the welfare of women around the country. The blog authors does not technically have specific authors since the blog is so widespread. Instead it has a group of people that sort of run the blog. The presidents are Nancy Duff Campbell and Marcia D. Greenberger. The center began in 1972 (the year of Title IX as well), and from there they have been fighting for and discussing women's rights. The actual blog had its first entry in April 2007. From there there has been posts about every 2-3 days. The authors use different links in their posts to different articles, videos, and speeches that help prove the point they are trying to make. There is not any music or graphs in the posts, but there are links to videos and pictures.

I used the same blog to find a blog post related to my topic. Since the blog is the National Women's Law Center, the blog actually took a slightly different view from my persuasive topic essay. The blog supports Title IX, saying that it has helped women progress in athletics. I completely agree with this statement, as read in my essay, but I believe that Title IX should be changed in some way to help men's collegiate athletics, considering in this day and age men's sports at the collegiate level are being cut to fit the confines of Title IX. The author of the blog is Nina Chaundry. She is explaining her viewpoints on how Title IXis still having the same problems as back when it was first made, just not as severe. This was posted on Jun 23, 2010. The style of writing is different than mine because she is taking a tone of how Title IX is not doing enough, and in my essay I am saying that TItle IX is doing too much to collegiate sports.